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Bad Beginning to a Sentence

Fix the fifteen clumsy sentences by starting with a word later in the sentence. Starting in the right place will eliminate needless words and grammar mistakes.

The answers are below.

Example:

Wrong start: One thing that threatens to become a real problem is my addiction to video games.

Better Start: My addiction to video games threatens to become a problem.

1. Jane Goodall is a person that I admire.
2. Politeness is a needed quality that a successful waitress must have in order to do their job with a degree of success.
3. As far as automobile insurance is concerned, there are some ways that the high cost of it can be minimized by owners.
4. When it comes to exercise, that is something that my mother would never do.
5. In this paper I am going to show that the experience of giving birth to a baby is very painful for the mother.
6. Red meat is something that should be avoided if you want to stay healthy.
7. One subject in school that I am very frustrated by is Algebra.
8. His level of hyperactivity is at a point where it is a concern for Jack’s teachers at the school.
9. The cost of my trip to Europe is a consideration that my parents are worried about.
10. The reason why I worried was because the progression of my research project was going too slowly.
11. A reduction in costs of shipping of all of its products was implemented by the management.
12. My friendship with Jim is one relationship that I will never forget.
13. Cheering for the school team is something that should be done by every student.

A better place to start is highlighted in blue.

1. Jane Goodall is a person that I admire.
2. Politeness is a needed quality that a successful waitress must have in order to do their job with a degree of success.
3. As far as automobile insurance is concerned, there are some ways that the high cost of it can be minimized by owners.
4. When it comes to exercise, that is something that my mother would never do.
5. In this paper I am going to show that the experience of giving birth to a baby is very painful for the mother.
6. Red meat is something that should be avoided if you want to stay healthy.
7. One subject in school that I am very frustrated by is Algebra.
8. His level of hyperactivity is at a point where it is a concern for Jack’s teachers at the school.
9. The cost of my trip to Europe is a consideration that my parents are worried about.
10. The reason why I worried was because the progression of my research project was going too slowly.
11. A reduction in costs of shipping of all of its products was implemented by the management.
12. My friendship with Jim is one relationship that I will never forget.
13. Cheering for the school team is something that should be done by every student.

Answers are below

1. I admire Jane Goodall. (Or, if you must): I greatly admire Jane Goodall.)
2. A successful waitress must be polite.
3. Owners can lower the high cost of car insurance in four ways.
4. My mother would never exercise.
5. Giving birth is very painful.
6. To stay healthy, avoid red meat
7. Algebra frustrates me.
8. Jack’s teachers are concerned about his hyperactivity.
9. My parents are worried about the cost of my trip to Europe.
10. I worried because my research project was going too slowly.
11. The management reduced shipping costs.
12. I will never forget my friendship with Jim.
13. Every student should cheer for the school team.

Last updated 9/18/06